Friday, February 8, 2008

*Detrimental*

Detrimental

He wanted me
To be a flowing river
Eternally supplying his needs
Him, closed off
Always receiving
Me, feeding him a feast
Him, giving me
Dried up crumbled promises
Only for him to walk away
Me, dangling
Like charms on a bracelet
Along with all the others

©Shai Lynn Kai Davis

9 comments:

  1. Go Shai!
    Get Busy!
    It's ya birthday!

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  2. DANG!

    Him, closed off
    Always receiving
    Me, feeding him a feast


    ain't that always the way.

    I love it so much I'm scared!

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  3. Only a man can appreciate a good woman. A boy treats her like she's momma, giving no thought to what she provides, as if it is her duty.

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  4. you never ease to amaze me, miss shai. :)
    this is such a wonderful cool blog. i would love to be a part of the blogger delight. i may not be an author, but i may be your favorite poetess....

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  5. Thanks everyone for the compliments.

    @Sojourner G: Yeah, that piece was short, swift and powerful. It amazes me everytime I read it.

    @Blogger D: I still wonder who you are. LOL. Yeah, the imagery is acute.

    @Miz: Yeah it takes me back. I am glad I got "through" that.

    @G Johnson: Thanks.

    @sharon: Yes it is a trip and no it is not scary you like it is real. The best part is to make thru and be one better.

    @MegaRich: I realize it. I always did. I let loneliness get to me and feel for it. Just reinforced what I already knew.

    @Kai: Mz poetic wonder. You can join the group. I am a poet not an author yet. I know folks will LOVE your work. You are awesome.

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  6. Thank you for participating in our first Annual Readers' Choice Award. Good luck & Congratulations!

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